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Post by sunspirit on Feb 3, 2007 16:44:17 GMT -5
Name of Queen: Sunspirit
Age of Queen: 30 moons
Clan of Queen: CloudClan
Kits of Queen: Foxkit, Wildkit, Moonkit, Littlekit
Appearance: Her fur is a sunny gold, with orange-gold patches on her haunches, back and face. Her tail has rings of the same orange shade. Her belly is mottled white. Her pads are pink. Her nose is, oddly, black, as you would see in a black cat. Her fur is light and fluffy like a kittypet's. She has a scar running down the side of her face, just past her left eye.
Personality: True to her name, Sunspirit has a sunny dispostion. She is friendly and kind. But if you harm so much as one hair on the head of any of her kits, she'll tear your tail off. She did it, once... Sunspirit is smart and clever. She hunts well, and is a fierce fighter.
History: Sunspirit was born to Yellowfeather and Crowsky. She was one of three healthy kits.
At six moons, she was apprenticed to Owlstripe. She was a quick learner with a quick tongue.
At 22 moons, she had her first litter. A rogue cat had come near the camp when she was out showing her kits the area around the camp, and he tried to touch her kits. In a fit of rage, she ripped his tail off.
This is her second litter. Littlekit is the runt.
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Meadowstar
Clan Leader
Leader of CloudClan
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Post by Meadowstar on Feb 4, 2007 9:36:02 GMT -5
Okay, I just want to start off by saying that your application is good, but there are a few things that I would appreciate you fixing.
First off, I would to see the personality and history be a bit more in depth. Tell me if Sunspirit has any secret ambitions or if she sometimes gets depressed over something that occurred in her past. Tell me about her life as a kit - an apprentice. Who did she fall in love with and who is the father of her kits? How did they meet? Stuff like that.
Also, I have discussed the issue of Sunspirit being able to rip the tail off of the rogue and we've decided that Sunspirit wouldn't have ripped it all the way off; she could rip it off, just not completely.
Other than that, your application is fine. If you could please fix those few things, I'll come back and accept it.
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